請問小兒英文作文,grammar是否有錯

casshum

Hi, Jack
             Sorry about not returning your book yesterday,I was very busy study about the project Miss Chan gave us,so I was in the library all day .I 'll bring it to your house today at 3 o'clock.
                                                                                                                                              Sum

casshum

我總覺得grammar 有些怪,但小兒話我(媽媽)不懂英文文法,請大家幫忙修改下thx

casshum

Thx a lot

casshum

thx a lot

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原帖由 nathanwong6681 於 15-08-08 發表
Sorry for not returning your book yesterday,I was very busy with studying about the project which ...

呢段都寫得唔好。'with'是冇需要的。 'which given by' 也是錯。'
had'亦係冇必要。希望有英文高人幫幫忙。

Ocean419

比你參考：

Hi Jack，

Sorry about not returning your book yesterday.  I was very busy studying the project that Miss Chan gave us and I was in the library all day.  I'll bring it to your house today at 3 o'clock.

Sum

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原帖由 casshum 於 15-08-08 發表
Hi, Jack
             Sorry about not returning your book yesterday,I was very busy study about the ...

Hi Jack,
I am sorry that I did not return your book to you yesterday.  I was very busy studying the project that Miss Chan gave us.  I was in the library all day.  
I will bring it to your house today at 3 o'clock.

Thanks.
Sum

owennam

Hi Jack, I 'm apologize for not return you the book yestetday. Because I spend one day in library for studying the project from Miss Chan.  I will return the book to you at 3 o'clock today, cheers SUM