公文式啲英文嚇死人

Caduceus

成日聽啲朋友話，公文式啲notes好多英文錯，我而家終於信，連廣告都寫成咁，教材更加唔敢想像

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王家爸爸

Caduceus 發表於 19-7-3 20:40
成日聽啲朋友話，公文式啲notes好多英文錯，我而家終於信，連廣告都寫成咁，教材更加唔敢想像

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其實公文式係日本補底用既，香港人普遍英文比日本人勁好多，所以公文式英文根本唔適合香港既環境。

biffkwok

如果黃色字體是建議修改的話，也不見得有多好，五十步笑百步已矣！

Caduceus

biffkwok 發表於 19-7-4 02:49
如果黃色字體是建議修改的話，也不見得有多好，五十步笑百步已矣！

願聞其詳，我眼見所有錯處都改左，仲要俾曬原因

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1. Alternatively, you could say 'the Kumon Method was developed in Japan'. 'Was originated from' is incorrect.

2. The passive voice should be used.

3. This is better sounding as it avoids referring to being 'AWARDED several AWARDS'.

4. 'With the synergy of' could be replaced by 'through'.

5. An adverb is required here. I have suggested 'carefully' but others could apply. Using 'conscientious' in this way implies that the worksheets themselves are conscientious.

1. 除了 'the Kumon Method originated in Japan' 之外，我們也可說 'the Kumon Method was developed in Japan'。'Was originated from' 是不正確的。

2. 補習社是被建立的，因此必須用被動語態 (having BEEN established)。

3. 用動詞 'received' 可避免重複使用 'award' (has been AWARDED several AWARDS)。

4. 除了 'with the synergy of' 之外，也可更簡單的說 'through' (透過)。

5. 形容一些東西是如何被設計，我們需要用副詞 (adverb):

through CAREFULLY designed worksheets . . . (✓)
through CAREFUL designed worksheets . . . (✗)

王家爸爸

biffkwok 發表於 19-7-4 02:49
如果黃色字體是建議修改的話，也不見得有多好，五十步笑百步已矣！

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Caduceus

王家爸爸 發表於 19-7-4 09:15
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