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原帖由 stccmc 於 10-12-10 21:57 發表
Normally I am quite easy going with emails, as long as I don't need to stop and think.
Here I am not bothered by vendor vs vendor people. I am bothered by the passive voice. Nobody else require them ...
Dear Stccmc
It is always easy for us to find fault with the English written by other people, sometimes even people who are supposed to be authorities in this area.
既然你用日常實例,我想請讀者 proofread 以下一段一間學校介紹自己的文字(不需改寫,無謂益佢)。學校主持人自稱是英語專家,並曾在電視節目中「教」大家英文:
About xx College
xx College , which was founded in 1989, is a government registered private college in the HKSAR. xx, as the name implies, is a xx. We guide anxious students towards the right goals, and provide assistance for bona fide students to achieve success.
Thanks to the persistent and devoted efforts of the founders, xx College has evolved from its humble origins in a two-storey school in xx to 13 branches with a capacity of over 90 classrooms throughout the territory today. Every year, we nurture tens of thousands of students.
方便大家,我將中文版也貼上:
"學校背景
xx學校 (xx COLLEGE) 創立於一九八九年,乃一所於香港特別行政區政府註冊之私立學校。xx之意思是xx,象徵著xx一直引領同學步向光明前路,走出困境,邁向成功。學問為濟世之用,引領學生「本其所學,貢獻社會」乃本校一貫的教學理念。希望經過我們悉心的教育能讓學生認識真理、持守真理,他日定能貢獻國家、社會。
二十年來一直默默耕耘,憑著專業、誠意、關懷逐步建立了良好的聲譽,每年培育出數萬名學生。學生人數與日俱增,校網更拓展至香港各地,分校增至現時十三間,課室合共九十多間。"
該學校似乎不是BK的客户,大家應該不用害怕重蹈stccmc 疑案的覆轍,但會否惹來打手纏身,則未可知。
[ 本帖最後由 hog.wash 於 10-12-11 01:21 編輯 ] |
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